Writer effects and language analysis

Answer: Self-mark: one mark per explained quotation (up to three), plus marks for linking the effects to the idea of a turning point. A quotation with no effect explained earns nothing.

1. Quote and effect 1 — "the first storm finally broke" : "broke" suggests something held back for too long being released
2. Quote and effect 2 — "It paused, sank, and stayed" : the sequence of short verbs slows the reader down, turning a downpour into a deliberate act
3. Quote and effect 3 — "green in a place that had been grey" : colour contrast marks the change plainly and visually
4. Link back — together the choices present the rain as a response to a decision rather than luck

Examiner technique: Choose three quotations you can actually say something about, rather than three clever ones you cannot. The effect is the mark, not the device.

Answer: Self-mark: quote plus explained effect, three times, with a link to busyness or improvisation.

1. Quote and effect 1 — "have stopped pretending to be a transport service and have become a queue" : it shows the market taking over a street and its ordinary uses
2. Quote and effect 2 — "the whole towel is a shop" : the exaggeration is funny and it shows how little is needed to trade
3. Quote and effect 3 — "the queue is the only advertisement she has ever needed" : it suggests reputation replacing promotion, which tells you the market has its own order
4. Link back — small inventions and a queue that knows to arrive early create a place that organises itself

Examiner technique: Pick imagery that carries an attitude, not just a picture. "Smoke moves sideways" describes; "the whole towel is a shop" judges, and judgement is where analysis marks live.